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Mugger!


Author: runedot
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Meh... What do you think of it?



Oh, and the "Who wouldn't" song I just made up.


Mugger!



Juray waited silently, the alleyway was dank and smelly, but that mattered not, the prize was too great for such inconviniences to matter.
Then, a pompous young male, dressed in colourful clothing came wandering down the street.
He was singing the "Who wouldn't" song, which, in Juray's opinion was the worst song in the world.
"Who wouldn't want to date a hot-shot like me?
A man with all the dough to spend and spend and spend.
Who wouldn't want to date a hot-shot like me?
Only idiots and other stupid fools!" The jack-ass sang, in a pitiful voice.
As the fellow came past the alley, Juray stepped out and whacked him soundly on the head.
The idiot fell down without a sound.
"Juray! What the hell do you think you're doing?" came the voice of Macha, "We're supposed to be waiting for No-nose Magee to come along, not mug some poor fella!"
"Just look at him!" Juray protested,
Macha looked the fella up and down, "Yeah?"
"Now look where we are!" Juray continued.
Macha observed the bleak surroundings.
The two of them were in the slum part of town, it reeked of human excretion and egestion, and the streets were churned mud, and splodged each time anyone stepped on it, the brown that is the dead grass along the sides of the streets were a little bit better, but many quickly caught onto that, and most have been stood on, and also covered in mud.
"So?" Macha said,
"This pompous jack-ass is too well dressed to be walking through this part of town and not get mugged in ten seconds!" Juray drove in the point,
"Precisely, you mugged him," Macha said,
Juray just ignored Macha's fresh comment, "Unless, he was one that sane people wouldn't touch,"
"And yet, you mugged him," Macha muttered,
"This guy has to be bad, and catching bad guys are what we're paid to do!" Juray finished,
"We're paid? I must have missed my last paycheck," Macha said,
"Metaphorically speaking," Juray countered,
"Well, whatever, the water's already spilled I suppose, let's get him outta the way, so he doesn't alert No-nose Magee when he gets here," Macha relented,
"Grand," Juray said.
But, it was too late.
"Ar y' soor dat leetle click es dead?" came the slurring voice of No-nose Magee,
"Yes boss, he's as dead as Sitting Steven,"
"Ah! I'm happier than peegs in da mud rite naw,"
"Oh crap! We're too late!" Macha gasped,
"Oh well, we'll just have to take em' head on," Juray said,
"Ya, and boss, we've still got that matter wit... Who the hell are you fools?"
"No-nose Magee, you're time has come!" Juray shouted,
"Hwa hwa hwa! Who de hell do you tink you ar? Stick em'!" No-nose Magee laughed,
"Yes boss," replied the thugs, as they advanced grimly towards Juray and Macha,
"Oh crap..." Macha muttered,
"What better death is there than dying in the line of duty? Honour and Death!" Juray charged...




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  This was an interesting piece that made melaughparticulary in the middle with Macha and Jurah giving smart ass comments...interesting piece.
| Posted on 2005-02-20 00:00:00 | by selfbetrayal | [ Reply to This ]
  One thing you may change, is introducing the characters, and giving them names, because, i couldent really tell what was happening. No offence, it was written well, but you should prolly change the begining.
| Posted on 2004-07-04 00:00:00 | by WD20x2 | [ Reply to This ]
  Short and absolutely pointless... right down my alley 'That's a pun, son' Keep the stories rolling and the nonsense flowing...
| Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by Eggman | [ Reply to This ]


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