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    dots Submission Name: Abandoned But Not Without Beautydots
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    Author: EEKS
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 647/1072/602
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAbandoned But Not Without Beautydots
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    I am an abandoned building I think, sometimes
    I follow you up the stairs because what else is there to do at this hour besides follow a boy up an old marble staircase to trouble unknown
    or attempt suicide?
    We climb up a twisted ladder, its a broken wreck
    It reminds me of myself in the sunlight.
    I am not afraid of falling.
    Or at least, I do not fear falling of the ladder.
    Elsewhere may be a different story.





    Submitted on 2008-07-16 07:06:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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