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    dots Submission Name: Trying to Communicatedots
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    Author: Keiran
    ASL Info:    20/M/NZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 40/47/33
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsTrying to Communicatedots
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    The boy speaks in rhythm
    But she never had an air for music
    The girl speaks in code
    He could never decipher
    So tell it to me straight

    They're always reading between lines he never wrote
    Putting words in his mouth he never thought
    And it makes him angry
    So angry

    She always lied
    Because it made sense at the time
    No one ever cares enough to hear about the mess
    And it makes her desperate
    So desperate

    The whole worlds yelling "LISTEN TO ME"
    at the top of their lungs
    No one's listening though
    Assumptions of solitude and abandonment let us walk away . . .
    Deaf and becoming mute

    They never found anyone at all

    He moved out of home
    Into his own world
    Full of noise and lights
    What better way
    Too shroud his seething rage

    Until one day
    Not too long from now
    It ends badly

    What a shame
    That he never found anyone at all

    She packed up and moved on
    Another year
    Another black eye
    Buried under cheap makeup
    The girl inside still hiding

    Who would blame her
    If she went to sleep
    Seeping life into the hot water
    Wine glass shattered on the tiles

    Such a tragedy
    That she never found anyone at all


    And all this to hear someone say
    With feeling now
    “I know”

    Too bad
    They never found anyone at all

    They were just trying
    Desperately trying

    To communicate






    Submitted on 2008-07-17 06:16:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      communicating is number one in life. you show how much you care in this piece. every sentence has a special meaning. keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is interesting. The way I interprete is there is a boy and a girl who have feelings for each other that they cannot seem to be able to express due to miscommunication. Indeed, we women do speak in a way that is difficult for men to decipher. Men want to hear clear, concise phrases from us, but women tend to go around the the subject in question. Men are also sometimes complex to decipher for women when it comes to feelings. A man can be acting as though he fancies a woman, while his feelings are only neutral and vice versa. So sometimes it is very difficult for two people to express their feelings because an act of courage is not just a simple act. As I see it, they both liked each other but moved to different directions without ever finding someone right for themselves alas. Very good write.
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]


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