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    dots Submission Name: Solitudedots

    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1575
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    Wake up... Wake up, tired child
    Is the solitude you seek inside?
    Darkness you crave
    When did this appear in your mind?
    Sit and tune into self pity
    It'd be a worthy transition
    Finish your words before our attack
    The screams of abducted bystanders
    Dragged down below the sound
    Are you in time for the day?
    Certifying remorse with perfect desruction
    You will begin the cycle
    You will start the end of time
    Define happiness
    define the reason why you live

    Submitted on 2004-07-05 00:54:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well, out of the first six lines I thought that you were talking about someone who was retreating into themself to find solitude, but then the rest of it confused me, but i'd love it for you to explain it to me.
    | Posted on 2004-07-27 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this even better than the first one I read of yours... Damn, I don't remember the name of it. My favorite part was:
    "Define happiness
    define the reason why you live"
    So sad... but it had the perfect ring to it.

    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by LadyInRed88 | [ Reply to This ]
      if only people would take good advice.

    or read good poetry.

    i enjoy the message, taking from it a 'damn the sadness and live your life anyways' point of view. not without it's thorns however. you use language effectively and with clarity. andfor that... i commend you.
    | Posted on 2004-07-05 00:00:00 | by freeradical | [ Reply to This ]

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