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Wake up... Wake up, tired child
Is the solitude you seek inside?
Darkness you crave
When did this appear in your mind?
Sit and tune into self pity
It'd be a worthy transition
Finish your words before our attack
The screams of abducted bystanders
Dragged down below the sound
Are you in time for the day?
Certifying remorse with perfect desruction
You will begin the cycle
You will start the end of time
Define happiness
define the reason why you live
Well, out of the first six lines I thought that you were talking about someone who was retreating into themself to find solitude, but then the rest of it confused me, but i'd love it for you to explain it to me.
I liked this even better than the first one I read of yours... Damn, I don't remember the name of it. My favorite part was: "Define happiness define the reason why you live" So sad... but it had the perfect ring to it.
i enjoy the message, taking from it a 'damn the sadness and live your life anyways' point of view. not without it's thorns however. you use language effectively and with clarity. andfor that... i commend you.
Submission Name: Solitude
