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    dots Submission Name: Fledglingdots
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    Author: shaman
    ASL Info:    32/m/Holland,MI
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 821/406/72
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 929
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       just a journal nan thought i should post.
    thanks jade for inspiration.


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    dotsFledglingdots
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    Inde pendants hanging like charms dangling as arms sway and mouths say a familiar prayer. A kiss the only sacrament I care to receive. Belief without deeds is as wasteful as climaxing alone.
    I've flown featherless and undressed days until the naked face of space can be seen embracing planets. Our shadows; extraterrestrial silhouettes,
    viewed through telescopes by celestial beings skiing off of peaks on Martian mountains,
    Downing fountain drinks and showing off the fresh ink on their arms.
    Ignore the fire alarm and revel in the heat of the moment until each component of your form becomes scorched and crumbles humbly into a new beginning.
    Leave easels spinning like records,
    decorate your words
    as they violently purge
    and parchment partakes in passion.




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       Inde pendants hanging like charms dangling as arms sway and mouth say a familiar prayer. A kiss the only sacrament I care to receive. Belief without deeds is as wasteful as climaxing alone.

    !!!
    Holy Hannah dude

    I am a horrible friend, how do you ever put up with me. I have never seen this and I am ashamed :(
    So sorry, for my wishy washy ness...you do deserve better.

    I love this. Nan is right. Nice trip.

    XO
    | Posted on 2014-05-13 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      This Is Seductive.

    My concepts are changing I have given up smoking-I'm not that bored!(I always blamed it upon boredom)and I thought I was a social smoker but now Im living out of town a bit I only have myself to contend with!Living with some decent,wide-eyed people too tho.
    Ive been making decisions in my own favour.I'd quite like to get a tattoo also-though I've always been averse and might just stick with mehndi!
    The ones I like are japanese or thoses ghostly ones of female native americans.It would be nice to draw someone who youve never met!
    Free running is amazing Im going to watch some this sat night, a load of places are staying open all night in Brighton,so free films,food,music&swimmingunder water,art projected all around the city.
    I want to get into some taichi,went into a martial arts shop and they tried to sign me up to Jujutsu-have you ever done anything like it?I need to get fit!!!And be brave.Did I tell you I have a new little sister??
    Shes ace.
    | Posted on 2008-10-22 00:00:00 | by weepingwillow | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem, it moves the senses, it starts out slow then pushes you into a plunge
    | Posted on 2008-10-11 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel good about saying this should be posted. I thought about line breaks but sort of like the run on innocence. It floods the senses in a crispy way.

    Check out the spelling when you have time, but it's a surreal as anything you've written, I approve, what a nice trip.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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