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    dots Submission Name: Drunken Dilusionsdots
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    Author: No Talent
    ASL Info:    22/m/Ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 262/178/31
    Words: 356
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 35
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       well as you can tell by the title i was in an emotional drunken state when i wrote this soo... take it as you like and leave some feedback , thnx


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    dotsDrunken Dilusionsdots
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    To wake up in a world
    where u didnt exiist
    to forget ur loving hold
    and what i thought was real
    nothing ..
    nothing but a cist upon my heart
    growing slowly
    festering,boiling complete in disguest
    this sickness overwhelming my fear
    that i could lose you
    that i cant take it much longer
    maybe i'll give up
    maybe i'll lay here .,,
    and waste away as time drips slowley
    grain by grain
    till there is no more
    no more left of me
    no more left of her
    no more left of this fantasy
    and i dream
    and i dream of you, still...
    caught in awe
    by your preception
    forget what i feel
    and deny my dreams
    forgive my heart
    and realease these tears
    head back beyond the void
    held back beyond my sorrows and tears
    those that know my fears
    and follow my drunken thoughts
    swallow my fears and hold fast
    upon my inebreated state
    and still you lifted my spirt
    forever to never know
    what is real..or what you truly feel
    in the darkness of your sight
    withdrawn from this heros plight
    stuck within you
    within this darkness
    and this light
    will i ever learn to read
    to breathe..
    this feelings,overwhelming feeling
    which makes me weak
    forever lost.. drunken
    upon this night upon your heart
    i feel..
    you may...
    As i start to fall apart
    from begining to end
    i'll fall apart...
    Still i wonder
    will you ever care
    juss maybe , by chance
    could i be?
    your fondest memory
    wether here , or now
    remember
    i loved once
    and lost twice
    promised me thrice
    and thought of you on a fortnight
    but forgot before i thought to forgive
    though here i lay
    lost..
    enebreated upon you
    and the love within
    the love i wish for me
    although selfish i admit
    until then
    i'm lost,upon this sea
    endless and vast
    waiting for the day
    the day you really see
    throuh these eyes...
    Upon this vast drunken sea




    Submitted on 2008-07-17 17:27:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think I like this so much based on the fact it is something that we have all felt sometime in out lives. The bitter sweet part of this feeling however it may seem abysmal, is that fact that it makes us realize that there IS something or someone that makes us realize how important life is. It makes us realize that there are thing worth fighting for. the saying is true," there is truth in wine", meaning, at the times one is drunk, most of the truth comes out. Your inhibitions are taken away and the only thing left is your true feelings. The power of this comes from the raw emotion. Good write and keep them coming.
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by Nicholas Lala | [ Reply to This ]



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