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    dots Submission Name: Futilitydots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1034/1090/514
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dots Futilitydots
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    Beyond the pallid stars of night a dim
    Translucent spark may through the ether run.
    It has no kith or kin. It is but one
    Strange world where teeming magics soar and swim,
    And here stupendous sorceries still brim,
    Until the trumpets of oblivion
    Put out the fires of its mighty sun,
    Douse its magics on that far distant rim.

    I mark the light of that most distant star,
    Deep in the winter of my bitterness,
    And think I feel some ancient avatar
    Who's come this eve to cheer me in distress.
    He brings no truth, no humor, and no gold,
    But fills me with futility and cold.




    Submitted on 2008-07-17 20:00:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree, apt title for the piece. Sad and distressing but well put.

    But sometimes that's what we end up doing, observing, and reaching out to feel but most of all to feel anything.

    Its sad and futile but sometimes a nice cold night of pulling at the stars and sooth the soul in a way.

    Keep up the passion and brilliant work.

    ~flora~
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]
      There are just times when
    all the Kings Horses and all the Kings Men
    cannot raise a smile
    or a spark within!

    I like the title to this! There are certain females that can provoke moods and feelings such as this!

    Ah, but an excellent poem this be!

    'He brings no truth, no humor, and no gold,
    But fills me with futility and cold'

    Brrr!
    | Posted on 2008-07-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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