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    dots Submission Name: A Battle Insidedots
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    Author: Sirbongatron
    ASL Info:    19/M/NC
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 19/18/21
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 67
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 410



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    dotsA Battle Insidedots
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    So this is loneliness
    That vacant void
    This is trust, shattered and torn
    Never knew we’d come so far
    Never knew I’d fear so much
    Isolated
    So far from your specter touch
    I lust for velvet streams of sunlight
    Nights that ended in drunken fights
    At sparrows call, your head rests upon my chest
    Though no more
    This is loneliness




    Submitted on 2008-07-17 23:52:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This poem just grabs your attention for the start to the finish of it. It allows you to feel what you were feeling as you wrote it. I felt the loneliness that is in that poem. It's like you just invited me into your heart. You show how weak you were at that point because you were alone. Why did you write this I wonder because this sounds like a poem that has a background of pain.
    | Posted on 2008-08-10 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh this is quite melancholic, desolate, and heartbreaking! In my mind, I see an image of person who has not long ago broken up with a loved one. They have been together for such a long time, which is unbelievable for the person to be alone now without his love. The person seems a bit in denial, but gradually opens his eyes as time passes by and as days of loneliness persues. Perhaps that person even reminisces about past delightful memories and the sweet, gentle touch of his love. How unfortunate for him to wake up to bitter reality. This is quite a gloomy read, without any solution, resolution, only the realization that one is all alone.
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by wordsofmind | [ Reply to This ]



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