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    dots Submission Name: lavenderdots
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    Author: sadtrapofgravit
    ASL Info:    103.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    7.2 - 178/167/66
    Words: 40
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 189
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 264



    Description:
       


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    dotslavenderdots
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    I drowned lavender, before I knew
    any better. And sometimes there
    are frequencies I just can't hum,
    the likes of which a father is supposed
    to teach a daughter (somehow
    we never quite got to days
    where we both cared).




    Submitted on 2008-07-18 02:03:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thoughts:

    wow, some superb comments left behind.
    this makes me ache. this makes me want to forget. this...
    what is with distance? seems we are set up to fail the ones we care about most. all of us. seems even in the best of circumstances there is this stopping point, where no more can be given. and in the not so best of, well, there is longing. questions. answers, none.

    isn't it strange the things we choose to fill our time?
    can things be made right? really?
    i wonder if they ever look back on missed opportunities?
    are we those missed opportunities?

    i wonder if the stopping point is where we become who we are.

    fin and what?
    | Posted on 2008-10-20 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]
      useless comment!!!!! just continuing the trend!!!!!

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    yep.
    | Posted on 2008-10-09 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      UGH.

    does NOBODY listen to alia?
    she'll kick your asses. for real.
    | Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by sadtrapofgravit | [ Reply to This ]
      This has so much in just a few lines, and the sadness comes tru so clearly. Don't change a thing. Excellent work - a fave!
    | Posted on 2008-08-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      you put enough of you in this piece. keep writing
    | Posted on 2008-07-23 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this write though short was incredibly sad
    I can feel the pain you feel and the wanting to want to develop a Friendship with your Father with every word of this
    My Friend I never really had a good relationship with my Dad either until Id say the last 3 years
    Thats when I finally allowed His Love into my life and I have got to tell you it was one of the best things I have ever done
    The pain subsided and I cant even begin to tell you How good it is to finally say YES I LOVE YOU DAD
    Great Job!!!
    I will be Praying for you both
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a beautiful, simplistic poem. I love the way you broke up the lines, and how you used parenthesis in such a powerful way. The only suggestion I have is a small nitpicky one, that you don't need the comma after the word "sometimes".
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by WhatYouWill | [ Reply to This ]


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