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    dots Submission Name: the very thought of you dots
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    Author: littlepoet
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    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots the very thought of you dots
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    the very thought of you

    the very thought of you sends me into a thrill
    it makes me think of all perfect
    I wish to be and that you see me but I know I'm not..

    I 'm burying myself deeper in the sands of time
    as we grow older,as the years go by
    One minute I'm strong,But I know I'm not.

    is it all a an allusion of the I wish to have
    But most of all,As sit here with you now
    I bask in the joy of our love.

    you remind me of the time
    we sat all night and talked the whole night through
    when we first met and still do.

    I know its taken a while to greive for your mother dear
    but I'm sure she be happy that we are takeing
    the steps to claim this house as ours

    as we redecorate this house
    and claim it as ours
    the very thought of you makes me appreciate

    the time we spend together
    thank you my love.




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      you speaking about a friend who is very dear to you and passionate. keep writing. great piece
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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