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    dots Submission Name: newdots

    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    how can I explain this
    when it's said and done?
    Can this be this simple
    yet can't be overcome?

    I had it all, and lost it
    I've seen and held my life.
    I gained alot of pride back
    but lost my kids and wife.

    I cannot be home now
    I can't be complete.
    I can't accept what's happening,
    nor feel so obsolete.

    how did this all happen?
    where did I go wrong?
    how could I have failed so badly,
    when I fought so long?

    I am just too simple still
    to understand this change.
    I can't remember anything
    that can compare to this new pain.

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