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    dots Submission Name: The Moon Shines Brighterdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 43/22/13
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Sometimes we cut loose or want to anyway. It is part of our nature and also more than us each. And it can feel real good.


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    dotsThe Moon Shines Brighterdots
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    There are times when the stars align,
    when their effect is greater on things.
    Earth’s orbit moves a little bit;
    tides rise and fall more or less.
    Dogs howl louder under the moon;
    the moon shines brighter on them.

    There are times when emotions align,
    when their effect is greater on us.
    Our lives are shaken a little bit;
    we love and hate more or less.
    We sing louder under the moon;
    The moon shines brighter on us.

    There are times when the stars align;
    there are times when emotions align.
    When stars and emotions align,
    Tides, loves and hates can move as one.
    Then we howl and sing loudly under the moon;
    And the moon shines brighter on us.




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      wow, that's truly beautiful. i love it. i FEEL it, and i understand it. that counts a lot for a reader. what were you feeling when you wrote this?

    keep it up!
    -Elizabeth
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