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    dots Submission Name: The Moon Shines Brighterdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       We are all affected by the cosmos more than we understand. It increases our emotions, some perhaps for joy, others not.


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    dotsThe Moon Shines Brighterdots
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    There are times when the stars align,
    when their effect is greater on things.
    Earth's orbit moves a little bit;
    tides rise and fall more or less.
    Dogs howl louder under the moon;
    the moon shines brighter on them.

    There are times when emotions align,
    when their effect is greater on us.
    Our lives are shaken a little bit;
    we love and hate more or less.
    We sing louder under the moon;
    The moon shines brighter on us.

    There are times when the stars align;
    there are times when emotions align.
    When stars and emotions align,
    Tides, loves and hates can move as one.
    Then we howl and sing loudly under the moon;
    And the moon shines brighter on us.




    Submitted on 2008-07-18 15:16:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy Day! I enjoyed the passion in your piece ~*~ Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles 2 Share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-08-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Going back to primal instincts, our animal selves can oftentimes help us deal with the more challenging fate that takes place in our civilized existence, yes. What you wrote here: "we love and hate more or less" actually implies that when we allow our animal counterparts to take control we allow our emotions to go wild and escalate our perhaps diminish. In certain examples this can be true but perhaps our animal self shows what we TRULY feel best because we as people often keep up appearances, wear our masks and play our roles that we think are a way to achieve our wants.

    I like the comparison you used with the lunar effect on Earth. It's a great idea - very original. Also, I liked the way you intertwined the two stanzas to form the third.

    Good write!
    | Posted on 2009-08-10 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, that's truly beautiful. i love it. i FEEL it, and i understand it. that counts a lot for a reader. what were you feeling when you wrote this?

    keep it up!
    -Elizabeth
    | Posted on 2008-07-18 00:00:00 | by informations | [ Reply to This ]


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