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    dots Submission Name: Confused mind and heartdots
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    Author: Midnight Shadow
    ASL Info:    19/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 46/129/90
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 123
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    Bytes: 1090



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    dotsConfused mind and heartdots
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    I might hate everything you do
    the way you make me cry
    but even more
    the way you make me smile
    And i just can't seem to let go

    I feel trapped with no escape
    i want to be wild and free
    but i come back commited and loyal
    i can't just take this feeling
    and let it grow
    because i just want to let it go

    my heart opposes my mind
    my mind opposes everything i feel
    it's hard to explain what's right
    i keep holding on tight
    when i just want to stop breathing

    It's incredible when were alone
    it hurts and feels amazing though
    to be so near
    i want to bury everything i think and feel
    yet those moments we're together i fear

    I can't control the emotions or thoughts
    that keep confusing me
    because i love you but want to be free
    i'm overcome with everything
    What I've been hating the most about all this
    is that I hate how I'm being me...




    Submitted on 2008-07-18 15:21:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is amazing, and i completely understand what your saying, wish i could say it gets easier but im still trying to figure out how as well. i think my favorite stanza is the 4th one just because i know how it feels to feel so much yet wanna be free too, and the conflicting emotions, great job, hope it works out for you

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    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]


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