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    dots Submission Name: Head Over Heelsdots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    20/m/il
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 90/46/50
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 51
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1203



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    dotsHead Over Heelsdots
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    Oh she loves me!
    Like a crack addict,
    loves a dealer loves money.

    Oh she deserves me!
    Like the people.
    deserve the prophet deserve the truth.

    Oh she trusts me!
    Like the ghosts
    trust the angels trust god.

    Oh! She fucks me!

    This is a catatonic love affair.
    I'm an out of body experience,
    who screams to be forwarned.
    Because heavy is the head,
    of the bastard who ignores
    the treatises of "a woman scorned"

    I swear I'm as true
    as this grass that grows over head!
    A blue ground save tomorrow,
    because for yesterday can't be said.
    True love baby, tell me how my expression
    feels.
    Twist the heart into a beating fetus,
    I'm head over heels.

    God please
    sway the hoofbeats of infidelity.
    She stomps and brays,
    and walks all over me.

    It's hard to be a good man,
    when you're two years too young.
    I've lost my seed inside her.
    This is one whisper
    that can't be undone.





    Submitted on 2008-07-18 21:46:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. this really spoke alot to me. I like the structure of the first couple stanzas a lot. But I like that you didnt tie yourself to it for the whole poem. The second to last stanza honestly is like you took what I feel everyday and put it into words. jealousy's a [censored]
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by MC white | [ Reply to This ]



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