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    dots Submission Name: for nothingdots
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    Author: informations
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 22/20/25
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    this is not the way that i work
    what is making me so hard headed
    that i would go ahead and believe his shit again

    but this is the way that i work
    and i really want to stop
    i just do not believe i even do this

    who would have thought
    my dream as a child
    was to grow up to become this?

    this is out of my minds range
    and i feel strangely out of this world
    and i am not saying anything so i am not being heard

    i do not have to cry right now
    but i want to
    but i can not allow myself

    this is what i deserve
    and i deserve shit for saying that
    but you get what give

    the ride ends here, lover
    i have to get off
    or i lose everything

    for nothing




    Submitted on 2008-07-19 00:16:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "the ride ends here . . . " is an excellent ending for this poem. I also liked

    who would have thought
    my dream as a child
    was to grow up to become this?

    I read all your posted poems. I commented on only a few but feel good about reading them all. you turn some great phrases, make some excellent rhymes, and have a general continuity to follow the expression through. Thanks. - Jim
    | Posted on 2008-07-19 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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