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    dots Submission Name: Elaboration, please.dots

    Author: insipid sky
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 142/145/28
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I really don't like being vulnerable. Who does?

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    dotsElaboration, please.dots

    I wear my feelings well
    hidden up my sleeves,
    miniature in size
    with a smile that deceives.
    If you hurt me
    my face won't tell,
    It's under the surface
    of the pain I dwell.

    If you cared
    maybe just a little,
    you might understand
    Why I speak in riddle;
    Why my tongue is cryptic,
    the words a maze,
    and the only fluency
    is misery most days.

    Happiness is the goal
    that I can't seem to reach,
    it could be because I don't
    practice what I preach.
    I can't see the positive
    in every situation,
    and when I try,
    I find only frustration.

    Maybe if you truly
    wanted to reach out,
    you could fill me with hope
    instead of doubt.
    If you could see
    inside to my soul,
    perhaps you'd want to
    help me reach my goal.

    The possibilities are endless,
    I could even fall,
    but only if you show me
    that I wouldn't lose it all.

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