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    dots Submission Name: Hell isdots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 28/26/26
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
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    dotsHell isdots
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    Hell is not the Fire and Brimstone of the Old Testament.

    Hell may be the absence of God's love or the inability to pray.


    I know that Hell is endless nights of hallucinations.

    Darkened thoughts whispering behind you on parched skin wings.

    Eyes spread wide by an evil wanting-
    Watching Love's needle's thumping-
    Sewing to a timeless pumping-
    Their Flesh to a Crimson Daemons' joining-
    Your friends are now of hell.

    Hell is a locked off-white room with a foreign language scribbled on the walls; the center piece a 12 inch with rabbit ears.

    Insomnia.
    No liquor.

    Hell is a place where every ounce of sustenance you consume returns identifiable 4-6 hours later.
    And you never stop hurting.

    Loneliness and a needle.
    Hell is a place where the activity of the day is to stab yourself a thousand times...

    And it's the best part of your week.




    Submitted on 2008-07-19 18:02:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is a really disturbing piece. It just gives such a foreboding tone. Really a pretty strong work and a piece i would definitely be proud of. Good work.
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by jayisademon | [ Reply to This ]


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