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    dots Submission Name: the weather in our headsdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe weather in our headsdots

    will we pass
    into this liquid feeling
    & lay hands on the ghosts
    that we've made
    from the dreams
    that spill forth
    from the weather
    in our heads?

    i push
    the olive of my skin
    through the space
    where you're missing,
    deep into the ether
    of your invisible heart.
    you make meals of my words
    & my eyes
    while we're wilting.

    the days
    & the nights
    have become their own plasmas
    & i find thick walking
    tiresome to the feet.
    i wish to float out
    into the clean moon
    & find you singing
    in my perfect-ear.

    the water of my body
    is tugged by your gravity
    in all directions
    all at once
    & i can sense
    the astronomy of your absence
    in my veins.
    i wonder when the night
    will release the vapor
    of your touch
    upon me?

    soft collapses,
    let the allusive blues
    of our deaths
    become us.
    we are timeless
    where our bodies might touch
    in the travelled sleep
    of morning slumber,
    vested in each other
    like a tomb.

    Submitted on 2008-07-19 20:11:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      There is a gentle way to describe love and you've found it. I have a friend on another site who insists on wrapping love in various physical descriptions, it becomes odd to me to hear these.

    And yet if just enough is given to the reader to create a sense of
    motion, it can very interesting. This has a surreal quality.

    The timeless idea is just true, we do merge with all of it
    or is that just the way love makes us feel..

    Nice work, I'm really glad I read this one tonight.

    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      it's often stormy in my head.
    this one is very dreamy, very soothing in a way...
    yes, tomb-like...
    but filled with trinkets and incense.
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]
      nice one blackbird I like the thought of being timeless

    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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