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    dots Submission Name: Amphetaminedots

    Author: Razor2TheRosary
    ASL Info:    24 - f - Philly
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 238/127/51
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1497
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1496

       I've forgotten how to use words.. but I tried anyway.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    I'd kill to sleep, but pills are gone,
    and shadows veil the torch of dawn
    that no longer reaches my lung
    the way it did when we were young.

    A bitter ending to decay
    is wrapped around my throat's display
    of emptiness without your hands
    to strangle with perverse demands,

    and I worship every hour that passed when you were awake.
    Now I torture every flower that grows on your hallowed grave.

    Black swans circle barbed-wired gates,
    cursing the gods born from inmates
    who still value these conditions,
    praising stigmatic incisions...

    I could never be like they are.
    The burning source of one new scar
    singes chains that will not let go
    of everything they used to know,

    and I swore to the razor that it wouldn't touch me again,
    but the rusty nails of combat keep molesting plastic flesh.

    Now my words have no enemy.
    The river was deceiving me
    because currents were way too strong,
    and I should have known all along

    that the coldness of love's night skies
    would match how much I miss the lies.
    Amphetamine floats through my vein,
    but has no effect on the pain,

    and I'd rather die than dissolve the way I am this evening
    because it's hard to be absolved from sins that shouldn't exist.

    Submitted on 2008-07-19 20:45:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Its been a minute........................................
    How u,.........been?
    Good job...... What else needs 2 b said?
    I wish I had more time 2 check yr work.

    When I get time I will come back.

    Peace Ot

    | Posted on 2008-08-28 00:00:00 | by oononotthatguy | [ Reply to This ]
      You've forgotten how to use words plbbt please you know you're all that. Lol ok now that I have successfully stroked your ego time for some serious commentary...it was gooood. Thats all I can say really. I love the little lines you have just dropping by everynow and then like a mother-in-law to give critique. Lol that's so not right. Anyways it really was a nice piece you dont give yourself enough credit either that or your modesty is a ploy (hopefully its the latter makes for a better soap opera) eitherway its all good. Ok this comment is all over the place better end it before i get lost. umm ciao.

    Skipping away now,
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      you have sold me on this piece. you took me to another level. great, great piece. you broke down a last breathe of your words. giving your reader thoughts. keep writing. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Im Speechless!!!!!!!!!
    As I believe I told you before I fought with an addiction to Meth for 5 long years
    I am now THANK GOD going on 3 years sober and I have never felt better in my life
    I can Honestly say I know without a shadow of a doubt I will never return to the lifestyle I lead
    So much pain and so many paranoid delushions words could never express just how terrible and dangerous this drug truly is
    Again INCREDIBLE job!
    I am making this a favorite just to remind me just how far Ive come
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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