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    dots Submission Name: Can't Quite Erasedots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 433
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    dotsCan't Quite Erasedots
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    There's a fine line between love and hate
    But the sides are more alike than meets the eye
    Both emotions require care
    Think about it even if it's your infected sty

    You're smile is sincere
    They contain little kisses meant for her
    But things turn ugly one day
    And that's when emotions start to stir

    You're smile is fake and filled with wry
    The purpose is more to harm, hurt her back
    You stick your tongue out, you can make it alone
    So silly, you used to need her to stay intact

    You're hugs were warm
    They were a sign of your embrace
    But after time they turn
    They all just seem to melt away

    Can't say you don't care
    You know you still do
    Lie to her and yourself
    You're the one confused

    You cared before for her good will
    That care remains, but it has become jaded
    There's a fine line between love and hate
    Although that line for me has become faded




    Submitted on 2008-07-20 00:48:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    I cant say I understand the feelings you are writing of to well though because honestly though I am 39 years old I have never felt Love as in a relationship
    I think I have seen too many so called True Loves end in tragedy and that has made me afraid of Love
    Great Job!!!
    Looking forward to reading more from you in the future
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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