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    dots Submission Name: Good byedots
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    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 848
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1361



    Description:
       This is to someone that means the world to me. But I no longer mean anything to them. Just my way of saying good bye to the dreams that I once held so high.


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    dotsGood byedots
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    Iím sitting here watching you
    waiting for a sign of life.
    Take a breath, heave a sigh.
    Anything to show me
    that this love hasnít died.

    Please just open your eyes
    Give yourself a chance
    to see me one last time.

    I remember the first time
    you said those beautiful words.
    But now youíve locked them away
    Keeping them hidden from me
    But why? I felt the same.

    The words of your heart,
    once clearly spoken
    flowed like a river into a deep ocean.

    It was once so beautiful,
    So pure and so clean
    Once filled with the life,
    I, long for today.
    It didnít have to be this way.

    The beauty didnít have to end.
    You made it stop, dead in its tracks.
    You left me there caught in the dam.

    You left me thinking that I needed you
    Knowing that life wouldnít go on
    No, it couldnít, not without you.
    My broken heart has slowly mended
    leaving me with a scar.

    Now your eyes have opened,
    Youíve begun to breathe.
    But still you donít see me.

    You wonít hear my cries
    nor my tales of pain.
    The view youíve had of me
    Will never, ever change.
    So I guess this is goodbye.




    Submitted on 2008-07-20 02:34:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      good bye is not always the answer, but the new beginnning is best to look forward. bring your best life now. good piece. keep writing
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      ending a relationship hurts but you'll live on your young

    but I liked the thought you put in into it
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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