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    dots Submission Name: In Continuumdots
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    Author: realpoet
    Elite Ratio:    6.58 - 757/397/245
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Serious
    Total Views: 40
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    dotsIn Continuumdots
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    You can travel often and see much
    but none can give you the common touch.

    You can train a cat to chase a mouse
    but mice will still over run the house.

    A stud may show its penile thing
    but who can tell of love it sings?

    Regret may be a chance of sorrow
    but it will forget in the tomorrow.

    A flower may put on show of beauty
    but can it know a sense of duty?

    A father to son may chastise
    but who can say it satifies?

    They say what goes up must come down
    but where's the proof if not found?

    For all acts there are reacts,
    so why continue these wise cracks?

    THE END------
    a react in continuum.




    Submitted on 2008-07-20 04:32:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not bad at all
    You did a good job with the rhyme scheme in this one and showing that not everything is all its cracked up to be
    My favorite line is:

    Regret may be a chance of sorrow
    but it will forget in the tomorrow

    Thank You for sharing this
    I enjoyed it!!!
    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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