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    dots Submission Name: Voicedots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    4.23 - 221/218/95
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    leaves rustle in a dance
    the wind, their live band
    birds, their vocal ensemble
    but your voice remains still
    not a sound to be heard

    leaves rustle on a tome
    your words printed out and bound
    inked clues guide memories
    but your voice still remains -
    faded familiar sound

    leave, just leave without a word
    your thoughts riding on the wind
    echo back that distant call
    bring to life this one last time
    the hearts you left behind



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    Submitted on 2008-07-20 06:28:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      some people like to embody the notion of fleetingness; there's a surety and safety to not being stuck in one place for too long, i think. but you show what happens when one leaves and all that's left is a voice to be remembered, however achingly.
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]


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