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Submission Name: walk a mile with me dots

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Author:	littlepoet
Elite Ratio:	2.14 - 670/533/250
Words:	175

Class/Type:	Misc/Misc
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walk a mile with me dots

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will you walk a mile with me
a long life's path

who dares to laugh out loud and free
to run and play like a child

out in the open among the sun flowers
in an open field

I long to see a friend & hear someone laugh
along my journey

to walk among the evening light as the sunsets in the sky

a friend who has the eyes to see in the darkness like the owl

and a quiet rest as we sit out in the feild
to see the star's in sky

I'd love your company to see me along life's
weary way

I'd walk until the joureny end just for someone to listen about all my joy's & pain

but I guess thats why I'm writing poems in the middle of the night

would you please walk a mile with me tonight
just take a little time to listen

Submitted on 2008-07-20 06:32:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I understand the point that you were trying to make. However I don't think that it flowed as well as it should have. Good job though. keep writing.
| Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by lost2distance | [ Reply to This ]
Let's not walk a mile, let's try a distant. you meet different people on the roadside. cuase i have walk that line. great piece. keep writing.
| Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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