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    dots Submission Name: Give Me A Momentdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    20/f/WA or IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 354/430/184
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 59
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    Bytes: 1285



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    dotsGive Me A Momentdots
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    At the edge of water, a beach there, a shore,
    you crouch cautiously and stare
    reflectively, reflecting upon this reflection
    you see. It stares back shamelessly,
    mimicking a smiling face,
    mirroring two watching eyes.
    Yet what sight you take in, whether
    deemed lovely or impure,
    is meaningless compared to the depths.

    A mystery begs you to give it a moment.
    You are looking at the surface.
    What you see is in accordance to yourself,
    but you should have learned somehow
    that things are not as they appear,
    and what is seen is not all to be known.

    Someone once took a plunge, you know.
    They thrust a hand into the waters
    and better felt the rush of what is beneath.
    The swiftness of divergence,
    the rough currents of disparity. An ocean
    of grief, sands of regret, shivers of
    squalling pain, all found hidden quietly
    underneath the glassy, calm surface.

    However, also discovered with that reach
    into the enigma of the deep, was
    such a glorious spectacle, a fascinating
    and enchanting motion to behold, a power
    that moves, that flows, a moment
    in which waves are made.




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    ||| Comments |||
      Katie,
    I liked this poem. I liked it so much I favorited it.
    I suck at comment and crituquing btw.
    but, the last two stanzas made me think hard and re read theyre my favorite.

    amazing.
    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      Stunningly visual, the whole thing played by like a memory through my brain. I pictured ever detail, every glimmer of light, or sliver of darkness. The whole thing flowed just like a stream curving and cutting lazily through granite slowly growing into a river. The way you describe the qualities of the deep in such a categoric way, makes the tempo of the poem skyrocket. By the time I was on the last stanza I was reading really fast.

    The pace of the poem kind of reminds me to slow down in life, to stop, and enjoy delving deeper into the life stream to see the wonderment that lies in everything. I took it very spiritually.

    Great write, and a +Fav
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by Passionbyapathy | [ Reply to This ]


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