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Author: beatthedrum
ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Humble home early morn devotion and prayer
Mat meticulously placed for a forehead's rest
Incense invisibly washing worries from the air
Brass bowl vibrations under a caressing dowel

Holy honey for the bitterness of a cold society
Many the mantras for a mingled mangled mind
Inventing innocent manifestations of empathy
Beg beauty, pray peace and cry for compassion

Submitted on 2008-07-20 17:16:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ahhh, this makes me think of sitting sazen when i took martial arts years ago. this is quite a beautiful and peaceful way to start a day. this is perfect in its simplicity, and i am inspired to start my days with a prayer such as this. thank you for the inspiration, Chrys.!

| Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  Because this is my morning ritual, I really connect with this poem.
It gazes into the heart of a devotee of any kind and sees the universal love between us.

Who knows how that emboldened stance might open hearts, even in a world where nothing makes sense? And I think you've found some true answers as to how we will get there.

I love the mmmm sounds here:

Many the mantras for a mingled mangled mind

It's good to see you write and this is primo, I'm glad you're back.

| Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
  Yay! You're back, and all is well again. I was trying to find out what HMIB meant to you, and I ran many things through my mind, but nothing ended up meaning anything as important as the ritual of which you were speaking of. Maybe the names of Goddess...

Well, I love what you did here, but I can't say I have many words for it. I think you kept to what a ritual and a mantra was, though, and the sing-songy beat of this is going to stay in my head for quite sometime. Maybe I will call on it when I need a sense of peace.
Welcome back,
| Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]

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