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    dots Submission Name: Devotiondots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 64
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Humble home early morn devotion and prayer
    Mat meticulously placed for a forehead's rest
    Incense invisibly washing worries from the air
    Brass bowl vibrations under a caressing dowel

    Holy honey for the bitterness of a cold society
    Many the mantras for a mingled mangled mind
    Inventing innocent manifestations of empathy
    Beg beauty, pray peace and cry for compassion




    Submitted on 2008-07-20 17:16:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ahhh, this makes me think of sitting sazen when i took martial arts years ago. this is quite a beautiful and peaceful way to start a day. this is perfect in its simplicity, and i am inspired to start my days with a prayer such as this. thank you for the inspiration, Chrys.!

    peace,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Because this is my morning ritual, I really connect with this poem.
    It gazes into the heart of a devotee of any kind and sees the universal love between us.

    Who knows how that emboldened stance might open hearts, even in a world where nothing makes sense? And I think you've found some true answers as to how we will get there.

    I love the mmmm sounds here:

    Many the mantras for a mingled mangled mind

    It's good to see you write and this is primo, I'm glad you're back.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Yay! You're back, and all is well again. I was trying to find out what HMIB meant to you, and I ran many things through my mind, but nothing ended up meaning anything as important as the ritual of which you were speaking of. Maybe the names of Goddess...

    Well, I love what you did here, but I can't say I have many words for it. I think you kept to what a ritual and a mantra was, though, and the sing-songy beat of this is going to stay in my head for quite sometime. Maybe I will call on it when I need a sense of peace.
    Welcome back,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-07-20 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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