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    dots Submission Name: The Idea of Homedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 563
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       I don't know how much sense you can make of this but it actually has a thought process behind it. It's not really random.


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    dotsThe Idea of Homedots
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    How is it that something can go unnoticed and this shade cools off my burning shoulders, on a sunny day

    there is a door that opens if you look inside
    the floors are made of wood
    I sanded them down
    and painted them
    I wanted to just tear them up
    to begin

    opposing winds tossed and tumbled
    the sun came up and the moon went down
    the moon went down and the sun came up
    we changed wood
    to marble
    and back again
    before we figured out
    that we wanted to make an electric fence
    that wrapped around our houses that we built underground

    we dug a hole
    we used shovels
    and the dirt just lifted away
    and we piled it up on the sides of the yards
    we played games behind them

    I have this gun and you have that one
    I'll shoot you and you can shoot at me back
    please lets not really hit each other

    I took a trip when I wanted to go home




    Submitted on 2008-07-20 18:31:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It was pretty cool.
    | Posted on 2008-07-23 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the idea behind this is how we try to decorate and renovate and customize our homes to suit our personalites. But in the end your home is where your heart is.
    | Posted on 2008-07-23 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Strangely i could make sense of some of it. But i beleive the poem is literal. for some reason everything you do/feel is encompassed with a problem. Some ancient entity perhaps is pouring itself out of you, but it has a hidden flaw.
    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by Bozly | [ Reply to This ]
      to me, this speaks of an inward-outward expression of wanting change, that the narrator knows sure stagnation... or an explosion... will result.

    there's something reassuring in tone about this, yet afraid... of the unknown... for some reason.

    hushed yet loud... circular.
    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by discombobulated | [ Reply to This ]


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