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    dots Submission Name: Questions on the Ethics of Timedots
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    Author: _proper_noun_
    ASL Info:    20/m/OK
    Elite Ratio:    5.36 - 106/88/24
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsQuestions on the Ethics of Timedots
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    Is it that my sense of humor is flawed,
    Or is the world just funny in the wrong ways?
    Is the world even funny?
    Am I just making punch lines out of one or the other?
    Why is it that any sort of human contact makes the world feel so much more objective?
    Whether youíre getting hit in the mouth,
    Or hugging an old friend,
    Everything becomes real for those short spans of time.
    Hold your hand over fire,
    And you will get burned.
    Fact of life.
    Never touch the fire,
    And you wonít ever know how to deal with a burn.
    Fact of life.
    What happens when you get thrown in?
    Donít try and read me,
    Youíll just entertain me.
    I donít need entertainment,
    I need to get hit.
    By a truck.
    Thatíd be an objective reality I wouldnít lose touch with for a decent chunk of time.
    Speaking of which,
    Did you know it was relative?
    No one knows it better than those of us who work graveyard shifts.
    My time,
    Your time,
    Their time.
    There is no such static thing as our time.
    Some people think faster,
    So their time moves slower.
    Some people are older,
    So their time moves faster.
    All I have is time,
    And it wonít stop moving in a fucked up rhythm.
    Ever tried to listen to three songs at once?
    Imagine that happening every so often,
    Each song fading in and out,
    With a pattern that can only be defined by the man or machine that can define pi.
    Now turn the T.V. on and try and watch a documentary for an important term paper.
    Can you focus with that pulsating, drifting beat that never stays the same?
    Can you tune it out like a slushy machine hum,
    Or a dying air conditioner unit?
    It might be worth a shot,
    But most likely that paper isnít really worth a shit.




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      You said this:

    I'd really like to know if you can see anything I should change to affect a face into the mind of a reader, without describing any features. I think the reader can create a more real picture in their head than I can on paper, but I also believe that it is the writer's responsibility to take charge and give them a direction with such imagery.

    I think... this could be cleaned up a bit, but it definitely give a sense of who might say this. I know people like this; I'm sure you know people like this...

    Hm.

    Want more??
    I've just been really not into words lately, but I figured I owed this to you since a gajillion years ago.
    Let me know, with deeper questions, and I'll let you know.
    I really will this time.

    Dig the first two lines.

    Rachel
    | Posted on 2008-08-12 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]


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