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Author: black rose13
ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137 /97 /39
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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i want

hold my hand
whisper in my ear
say you love me

cause i want to feel
i want to forget
forget the moment
where love met my broken heart
and it all fell apart

prove to me
i can fall in love again
prove to me
i have nothing to fear
prove to me
i can have no doubts

cause i want to know
if you can mend
this tattered old soul
i want to know
if you can love
this broken down trainwreck
i want to know
if you can be
the one to rescue me.

Submitted on 2008-07-21 01:14:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  your expression in words has set matter of stillness. your reflection is heavy and grand. great piece. keep writing. show your writing from the heart. check out my page
| Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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