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    dots Submission Name: i wantdots
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    Author: black rose13
    ASL Info:    16/f/where do I live?
    Elite Ratio:    1.35 - 137/97/39
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 495
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    dotsi wantdots
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    hold my hand
    whisper in my ear
    say you love me

    cause i want to feel
    i want to forget
    forget the moment
    where love met my broken heart
    and it all fell apart

    prove to me
    i can fall in love again
    prove to me
    i have nothing to fear
    prove to me
    i can have no doubts

    cause i want to know
    if you can mend
    this tattered old soul
    i want to know
    if you can love
    this broken down trainwreck
    i want to know
    if you can be
    the one to rescue me.




    Submitted on 2008-07-21 01:14:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your expression in words has set matter of stillness. your reflection is heavy and grand. great piece. keep writing. show your writing from the heart. check out my page
    | Posted on 2008-07-21 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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