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Biographical


Author: Imadjinn
ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
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Yes, the word choice at the end was intentional.

Just something thrown together in literally two seconds...

I don't even know why I posted it


Biographical



I live in a little floating house on the river.
just past the train tracks.
but i am never home.

I am usually out somewhere,
traveling in an airplane, or on a train, or in a tomato.
but someday I will save up enough money to buy myself a blimp.

and when I grow up,
I want to be a children.




Submitted on 2008-07-21 12:41:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  That travelling in a tomato line reminds me of the musician Jason Webley who converted his car into a tomato. I love it when real people live like they're in a poem.

I like how whimsical this poem is. The ending makes me think the "I" wants to dissolve into children, to have lots of children who will live on rivers and in blimps, knowing that life is a transitory thing (like his constant travelling) and growing up is learning to be a brief part of something bigger.

That's what I get from this. That and Webley driving his little tomato.
| Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by Icarus | [ Reply to This ]


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