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    dots Submission Name: Moondots
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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Nature
    Total Views: 160
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    Bytes: 489



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    dotsMoondots
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    Every night, you show the light
    you smile to me, everyday
    when i look at you in the sky.
    But sometime i feel, that you chase me
    and coming too close to touch me.
    And sometimes, when the sky is just so gray
    i can't see you, and you can't watch me
    i miss you and want to blow,
    blow these clouds away to see you again.
    I don't know why you are so miraculous, so high and far, just mystical






    Submitted on 2008-07-21 14:23:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am not one for comments, but I looked upon your page and saw this. I am a wolf by heart, soul and mind. And this touched the stone walls I use to cover my soul from danger, I loved it...Congratulations.
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    | Posted on 2009-08-18 00:00:00 | by WolvenGlade | [ Reply to This ]
      killer piece, love the emotional aspect of it
    | Posted on 2008-08-11 00:00:00 | by DorianGrymstone | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, nothing on the actual poem that I'd change except cap. the 'i's otherwise it's good.
    Vynom
    | Posted on 2008-07-25 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      your describe the moon with feelings. you show a special vision. nice piece. keep writing . always write from the heart
    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]


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