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    dots Submission Name: In Luxordots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1042/1118/535
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 85
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       Rameses II--Pharaoh (1279-1213 BC) during the 19th Dynasty


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    dotsIn Luxordots
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    I dreamed that Luxor’s fane again was made
    To rise into the sky with special guile.
    Its squat and mighty pillars in a style
    That long ago were lost to Time’s parade.
    The summer moon came up, a serenade
    I heard, that drifted out across the Nile
    Sung by a girl whose voice could sure beguile
    A statue cast in bronze or carved from jade.

    Then in my dream I strode stupendous halls
    Whereon were painted gods in pastel hues
    And giant Pharaoh lined the titan walls
    In moon glow lit with yellows, greens and blues.
    Then I felt a cold most chilling breeze,
    Before me stood the ghost of Rameses.




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      I know I have said it before but I really like your style, I like how it appeals to all of the senses, there is a message hidden in the pieces but moreover there is this scene created by the sensory details. I really like how you eloquently flowed all of that together in a specific genre and beautiful piece. Bravo.

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