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    dots Submission Name: a lasting sleep of purpledots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa lasting sleep of purpledots

    peel hard
    into the tight skin
    of lovers
    so that they can feel it..
    & may your flesh become
    the vibrating heart
    of the evening.

    where the lips meet,
    swell into a greeting
    that has no release.
    let it linger on
    till the days
    fold into days
    into days

    will my whispers
    undo you
    if they can
    if you let them?
    will the cathedral
    of our hands
    soothe us
    into a lasting sleep
    of purple.

    i'll let go
    the creatures of my past
    into the flickering always
    for the chance to know;
    is it possible
    to tame
    the flame inside me
    for awhile?
    or will it grow
    until it consumes me
    once again...

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