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    dots Submission Name: Building Momentumdots

    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 325
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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       havent posted in a good minute...thought i'd throw somethin up

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    dotsBuilding Momentumdots

    Building Momentum

    I exhibit the tranquil chaos, of a strangled Adolf, rioting an Angels séance
    A diversion of a brethrens hope
    while relations pace lost, with statements paid off, by the Archaic fake Gods,
    the disturbance is selective trope

    get trashed with divine rage, click, click, symbiotic castanets high gauged
    To damage ya life veins, left ‘out of ya realm’ like being cast for the Ninth Gate
    On the brink of wars Holy ghost, he who thwarts, mostly boasts..
    a link to warn, souls an goats, ‘expect a return’ like Bill Gates Portfolio
    inflicting prose as a misanthrope, like listen Hoe,
    a dames thong, our ‘Date On’(Dayton), have ya missing spokes…
    Thatz just the beginning, expect a double helix convergence
    As I turn people to servants, evil with a lethal deterrence
    Pipe bombs so the cookie crumbles…I’m the Keeblers insurgent
    When I prey upon the cretins, I’ll enflame the psalms of heathens
    ‘Draggin’ ya beliefs through Triad oaths like an Asian mob allegiance (dragon)
    as the days is long an breathin, the rays will dawn ya reason…
    u think doin labor, while heaven with a slurpee is getting paid upon completion?
    that’s an immigrant innocence, societies kindred wince in repents
    still on the surface, cant see a glaciers danger without Inuit vigilance
    a puppet afraid to get ya feet wet, building momentum without kinetic etiquette
    no segued rhetoric, I’m ‘burning the strings’ with a Jimi Hendrix penmanship
    its no ‘current’ debate like stations with a crew, ‘anchoring’ the news,
    that I’m ‘tribal bitch, when I shake spears’ for the Taming of a shrew…
    observations have ya ‘body scanned’ when ur a ‘patient’ in the nude,
    cant get ya ‘hours back’ not even with daylight savings in ya youth
    smokin blunts like Jamaicans in a room…’weights’ within the truth..
    u just pickin up speed for the ice ahead, remember theres danger in the ‘luge’

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    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]

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