This is an excellent write that speaks strongly from the heart, and sends a clear lover's message!
I think all it needs is a little "tinkering" with the structure and the formatting: following is an example of how putting the thoughts more together might help the reader get the dynamics and understand the verse.
I have done some things Iím not Proud of at all!
Iíve committed sins against myself,
and charged into hell, letting life unfold,
losing myself, and forgetting
all thatís not right!
When this is done, your embrace saves me!
Your kiss awakens me!
Your touch excites me!
And I realize it is a matter of time
before I lose,
You are right to say it doesn't flow very well. or well, let me rephrase it, It has a difficult flow. Personally, I don't think the flow hinders this work at all it is still pretty strong. I would just rework the formatting of this piece, because the way it is typed is a little difficult to read.