wow there this piece is just dreanched with unbridled wanton yearning to be loved by this individual that you write about. i really liked this piece for its honest and direct delivery of the emotions that you felt i felt your longing
You simply cannot have enough poems on this topic. It might be the oldest subject in the world but the experience is unique to everyone. I thought it was nice. Simple, yet compelling.
thoguh the subject isn't the most original, your imagery is very good. cliché or not it is still a fairly good write. as fir finding yourself in writing u will, especially whn u revisit some of your old stuff. only remember, you gotta keep moving forward in your writing.
This is definately not the most original piece of work I have ever read. It's not terrible, I've just seen it too many times before. Re-worked it could be good, but as it stands it's just too clichéd for my liking.
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