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    dots Submission Name: no Longer The silhouttedots

    Author: Mithrandir
    ASL Info:    28/m/N.Y.
    Elite Ratio:    4.62 - 452/681/113
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I've been wandering

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    dotsno Longer The silhouttedots

    This time I won't run
    gonna be standin tall
    better shoot to kill
    cause vengance shall be swift

    No longer the silhoutte
    words shall shatter
    the tyrant's before me
    and deeds will make me whole

    You never thought I'd break
    But I was scattered pieces
    from the very start
    It's time for eyes to be opened

    Clouds are parting
    think your ready?
    theres a fire I've been hiding
    Old bonds shall be broken
    and this world unmade

    the wind is changing
    fire shall spread
    no longer the silhoutte
    this time Im standing tall

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      i love the feeling of this...not going to be brought down a second time. let the winds blow, the ocean swell and the fire of hell come swirling upon you but you Will Stand Tall...LOVE it
    there is a feeling of deception as well...a lying lover or a fri-enemy trying to deceive. either way the the message is precise...straightening of the back bone a clear cut move to bring all disbelievers to there knees.
    your description says 'I've been wandering'
    that gives our minds room to move about this piece with open eyes so to speak and get the most out of it.

    BRAVA my friend
    good to see you here and be able to leave some thoughts behind
    | Posted on 2009-10-08 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      think you're ready

    sometimes worlds need to be completely unmade. not necessarily in a devastated 9/11 kind of way but in a 'if this is unmade then i wont try to go back' kind of way

    standing tall has its advantages but just make sure you dont look too much like a poppy... dunno about your culture but in mine no one seems to like tall poppies and finds ways of cutting them down...

    take care and good luck in building or pioneering a new world
    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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