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    dots Submission Name: birth, life, deathdots
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    Author: essence of life
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    Birth

    Your born into the world yep its ur birthday the time ur carefree no worries no problems.

    Well for most that is. Some have it bad others have it worst.

    I don't no ur problems but I do know ur alive so Happy Birthday.

    Life

    Your older the pain is wosrt you wanna shout you wanna die.

    You believe your faith is gone you try too believe but you can't.

    You look for help that won't come your hopeless yeah thats right you gave up and gave in.

    Death

    Your dead who nows why you might of been murdered or you killed yourself.

    Either way it was ur turn too go sorry but its true you where ment too live and you used your time you where a friend a child even a lover but now ur gone.
    Goodbye.





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      See, I like this alot. I see the same kinda comments on my page. The feelings you captured made me rethink my own outlook. I've always known people have it worse than me.. You do a good job of reminding. I think this'd be best spoken aloud.
    | Posted on 2009-04-08 00:00:00 | by MyWorld | [ Reply to This ]
      "I know your 15 and thats all you feel most of the time."

    Why? Who said being young hurts?
    And yeah both of you have flawed perspective of life itself. Life is personal, not everyone has the same experiences, hence life can be modified any way you like it or more realistically speaking any way you can.
    | Posted on 2008-07-25 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks for simplifying my life...Sigh.
    SPELLCHECK. Use It.


    Ess, life is sooo much more than pain. I know your 15 and thats all you feel most of the time. But, believe me, give it 6 months. It'll be better I promise.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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