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Submission Name:
Revelations (End of a Masquerade)
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Author:
lebeauvide
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149
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Poetry/Serious
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This is what I am.
Revelations (End of a Masquerade)
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Color fades all to black
And the curtain lowers on this charade
We take off our masks
And turn to meet face-to-face
I hesitate to let you see
The girl behind the smoke and lace
What would you think of me,
The person you've always had to chase?
I prepare to run to spare myself
From the look that your eyes will get
When you meet the hideous creature
That you have not seen yet
I feel a touch on my shoulder
And I freeze where I stand
How could it be that you make me feel?
Paralyze me with a touch of your hand?
The masquerade is up-
And I turn and let the mask fall
I look up to meet your eyes-
And there's no one there at all.
Submitted on 2008-07-23 04:19:06
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