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    dots Submission Name: nothing but a memorydots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Alone
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1934



    Description:
       after a long absence from this site i'm back with my newest piece of work. this piece was inspired by 2 diffrent things. the song "inside the fire" by disturbed, which is about david draiman's highschool girlfriend who commited suicide and my own personal hardships that i've recenty had. however i found that there are those who are willing to put everything down to help and thus help me get through those times and lead me to write this. i hope you enjoy.


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    dotsnothing but a memorydots
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    {intro: thoughts of lonliness and ever haunting feelings of unworthiness lead so many dwn the jaged hallways of the mind that lead to suicide, for those few who try and help... keep doing your part and maybe you can save those tourtured souls from there eternal damn nation}

    (HERRRRRRAHHHHH!!!!!)

    BREATH!
    (7 second wait)

    hear me out now,
    time to tear it down,
    i'm going all around,
    just to find myself!

    i'm here to breath it in,
    and forget my life of sin,
    i don't think i'll ever win,
    in this life of mem-or-y!

    chorus:
    take me in tonight,
    i'm gonna make it right,
    it's time to end your life... toniiiiiiiight!

    you'll never see me there,
    with my vicious evil stare,
    step into my lair... annd FEEAAAR!

    crazed from insanity,
    you will never reach me,

    why do you bother with MEEE?!!?!!

    (end chorus)

    sorrow and emptiness,
    chase away every breath,

    leave me here to SUFFER!!!

    tell me.. WHY!?!?!

    (chorus)

    take me in tonight,
    i'm gonna make it right,
    it's time to end your life... toniiiiiiiight!

    you'll never see me there,
    with my vicious evil stare,
    step into my lair... annd FEEAAAR!

    this life ends with me,
    no more what could be,

    why do you bother with MEEE!?!?!
    (end chorus)

    hear me out now,
    i've torn it all down,
    i'm traveled all around,
    and never found myself!

    i'm out of breath this time,
    is suicide a crime?
    i'm well past my prime,
    i shall become a mem-or-y!

    (memory!) X3 fading out




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