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    dots Submission Name: trust is a burning barndots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotstrust is a burning barndots
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    could we slip
    into the strangeness
    of everything
    & somehow
    orbit each others hearts
    in some sort of
    mutual rotation?

    i split
    the tongue
    of my mind
    for the sake
    of believing.
    i'll give you
    all the diamonds
    that fall from my lips
    for a lifetime
    beneath the vapor
    of your skin.

    i've watched
    you in the depths
    of my sleep
    for ages.
    you who go on fearing love
    despite the geometry
    of our magnetism.
    despite having known me
    before you could.

    is there a path
    through this river-always
    that will lead me
    to the weather
    of your touch?
    will the softness
    of our memories
    breathe a storm
    into the universe
    that we've become?

    i answer questions
    with questions
    until i'm silent.
    there is this point
    where my meaning
    no longer carries words
    & all that i can really do
    is break free
    from the confines
    of my past
    & move into the possibility
    of your existence.




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    ||| Comments |||
      just yesterday
    all my question marks came home
    with them, I sit in the dark
    and ask them of their journey
    they say it a dream
    in which every face is our own

    how is it that we can feel something special, heartfelt even with someone, and they don't get it?

    that's one idea that pulled me into the depths of this poem

    and the other is how we ask questions of ourselves until we are satisfied, but seemingly make things that are so clear into murky waters? of course, you understand these musings, so I can speak of them..

    I like you style very much and will certainly return again.
    beautiful.

    Nan
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by str8FromTheHart | [ Reply to This ]


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