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    dots Submission Name: Home is where the Heart isdots
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    Author: twistedchick
    ASL Info:    17/girlie/United Kingdom
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 14/39/52
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 71
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    Bytes: 833



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    dotsHome is where the Heart isdots
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    I can't let this go
    Our love means everything
    I owe you my life
    because you gave it back to me
    I never really lived before your love
    I was a wild and friendless fool
    allowing something evil within me
    to control my life
    never fought back just laid back
    you came here and showed me something new
    you showed me love
    This new emotion started to build fast within me
    I started to fight the demons that were living inside of me
    and I started to win too
    now there gone and its only you and me
    keeping each other from pain
    Your now what I call home
    and now home is all I want to go to
    now when they say "Home is where the Heart it"
    I can say its true, because your home and my heart are yours.




    Submitted on 2008-07-24 01:15:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like it, its sweet.
    I also think it catchy, to put the title in the poem as well, I think it makes it more memorable, and easy to recognize.
    I found a certain depth, describing the power of your love that was helping to fight the demon's inside you.
    | Posted on 2008-07-24 00:00:00 | by AllyV | [ Reply to This ]


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