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    dots Submission Name: Goliath's Feetdots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    17/F/Florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 303/296/116
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 64
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsGoliath's Feetdots
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    Who am I anymore?
    Lost lover?
    Closed door?
    Tell me! Please.
    I was so shallow.
    I was so weak.
    I was so wounded.
    That was ME.
    But, I existed.
    I was alive.
    I had thoughts.
    And Feelings,
    And Dreams
    And I was real.
    Now nothing is as it seems.

    I once knew an Angel.
    Who told me of heaven,
    Let me stick a foot in the door.
    The slammed it in my face.
    I once heard the church bell,
    And I ran to work my way in
    I tripped and fell to the floor
    I was saved by Grace.

    But, Now time stutters,
    like an child over its tongue.
    Now time sputters,
    A car that won't rightly run.
    And I'm fading away.
    Little peice by peice.
    I turn away.
    Letting my soul cease.

    Oh tell me how you do it!
    How do you survive?
    I can see it in your step.
    I watch the fight in your eyes.

    I wish things were easy.
    But then again they probably are.
    Hindsight's twenty-twenty.
    Things look easy from afar

    I try to topple the city.
    By changing my ways.
    I try to change me.
    And end up running away.

    There are demons to beat.
    I gotta keep my chin up.
    But, I get crushed.
    Under my Goliath's Feet.









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      hmmmm....i was watching this movie with Danny a few days ago and there was the coolest line in it: "Why do we fall? to learn how to pick oourselves back up."

    you might not always land on your feet, just yet, Kitten, but you always pick yourself up with grace and dignity.

    i adore you,

    Mummie
    | Posted on 2008-07-25 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      hey baby great writing but what are you trying here I'm confused . I don't understand it all okay
    | Posted on 2008-07-25 00:00:00 | by anguished_child | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, Chicka. This is really good. There is no greater enemy then one's own mind. It seems half of the hurt that is put upon us was placed by our own two hands. There are a couple typos, nothing that took away from the over all. It is hard to watch someone walk by so gracefully through life when you seem to trip over your own two feet every step of the way. The only thing we can do is keep our chin up and when we take a spill, we roll out of it, jump up, and say, "Yeah, I meant to do that."

    Be well, sweet girl.
    Bonnie
    | Posted on 2008-07-25 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


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