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    dots Submission Name: If god willing.dots
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    Author: xXCptn_SephyXx
    ASL Info:    22/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 46/119/104
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIf god willing.dots
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    In the midnight hour,
    I could only see—
    The expression on that face
    When you look at me.

    Couldn’t help but see
    The feelings you have—
    Is it real?
    Was it deceit?
    How could I be the ultimate judge
    Of the mystery inside that shell
    And the endless thoughts of your mind.

    If one could only see the colors inside this body—
    Hold on tight,
    And never let me go—
    Dance with me,
    Become the yearning passion—
    Kill the doubt
    And never ever leave this soul behind.




    Submitted on 2008-07-25 17:28:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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