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    dots Submission Name: Clean Out Your Heartdots
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    Author: Heidiluv
    ASL Info:    17/F/behind you
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 13/33/27
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 623
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    Description:
       Breakups. They suck.


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    dotsClean Out Your Heartdots
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    Do you know what it's like to clean out your heart?
    To take down every picture and tear them apart?
    To delete all the emails present from the past?
    To tuck away remindances of what didn't last?
    To box up the prizes from this year's fair?
    To smile when they ask, and act like you don't care?

    Do you know what it's like to have to move on?
    To scribble out the notebook hearts you've drawn?
    To question the reality of what he meant?
    To take five showers to get rid of his scent?
    To embrace a friend so they're the last one you've hugged?
    To try and use every distraction like a drug?

    Do know what it's like to clean out your heart?




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      Yes, i do actualy. Well there are specifics like they were a girl and i didn't take five showers. I don't draw notebook hearts so i didn't need to scribble any out either. But most everything else I related to...and a lot of my poetry reflects that.

    Cleaning out the heart is tough and it's like despite your efforts there is always another little little thing you forgot that reminds you of them. The trick is to move on without shutting yourself off completely...wish i knew it lol.

    I like the poem a lot. The repition of the opening words and repeating of the opening verse at the end works well.
    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by nomad knight | [ Reply to This ]


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