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    dots Submission Name: words from a confused teenagerdots
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    Author: twistedchick
    ASL Info:    18/girlie/utah
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/58/73
    Words: 398
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 781
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2292



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    dotswords from a confused teenagerdots
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    Iíve been lonely for so long
    Constantly depressed
    Yet none of you seems to look close enough to notice
    None of you seems to look close enough to care
    Iíve got this shadow overhead
    Been sleeping with a dark cloud above my bed
    But still
    Still you just donít care

    I start talking to people here and there
    Yea youíre right I have not met them
    Yes maybe youíre right I do not know everything about them
    But for most of them
    I trust them with my very soul
    Couldnít you see I finally started to smile?
    Couldnít you see I finally started to laugh?
    You finally seen Iíve changed
    And you donít seem to like what Iíve changed into

    So nowÖ
    Now you keep my stars from shining
    Now you take my signs away from me
    You do your best to put me down
    You call me stupid
    You call me a fool
    But at least I was a happy one
    Do you really like me dazed and lost?
    Do you really just hate me?

    I needed some directions
    So I was open to your suggestions
    I need inspiration
    Not just another one of your negotiations
    But since you kept me in circles
    I simply blocked you all out
    You all want me to block the world out
    Because you all think its purely evil
    But no one seems to look for the good
    None of you have ever opened up to this world as I have
    If you can not see the good in someone
    How can you possibly see it in yourself?

    You kept me here when I wanted to be there
    The one thing I had that made me feel alive
    You took a destroyed in front of me
    I try not to hate, because I know itís wrong
    But sometimes you really make it hard on me

    I liked being a bird
    I got to fly my own way
    I love this world
    No matter how bad it can get
    So donít hold me back
    Let me fall just once
    It is what makes one stronger

    So here I am once again
    Writing my feelings down on paper
    Because the way you make me feel
    Makes me believe that I can trust no one
    Is thatís true
    Then how can I trust you?




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