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    dots Submission Name: A Capite Ad Calcemdots
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    Author: Passionbyapathy
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio State
    Elite Ratio:    7.1 - 167/140/83
    Words: 223
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 85
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsA Capite Ad Calcemdots
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    Ive seen the skies rain down embers.
    My heart beating faster in tune,
    To the silence of a compact telephone
    Head rested against a cradle of clouds
    Up high enough to scrape the horizon moon.

    You can tell from the way I pride my soul
    That I’ve just been dancing with you
    In some fictional Victorian ballroom,
    Through wires tangled across the countryside.

    I feel fine every time I’m around a smiling face.
    So, close those lips and let that grin speak volumes
    About the way you look, and feel, and sweetly taste.
    Because, when you and I are together,
    The Blues don’t sound so lonely anymore.

    I wish you’d stop to breathe and speak
    Between my rambles and admissions.
    I want nothing more than to hear your voice
    As it harmonizes with each spoken word,
    And leaps from your tongue tip
    To dive into the aqueous transmission.


    It travels from your lips to my soul.
    Like a curved dagger of serenity
    Aimed at a violent heart attack.
    Passion so hot that it stings with pleasure,
    Like a tidal wave raised high to break the shoreline.

    So spend some time on my beach building sandcastles.
    Think more about the way the grains feel on bare skin,
    Than on the short-lived insignificance of your effort.






    Submitted on 2008-07-26 03:17:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      J,
    The way you describe women and the way you love them is absolutly phenomenal. Man, I wish every male knew how to do that. But, anyway,

    TYPO--Ive--->I've
    [But, I'm not that Picky...Really. I swear.]

    I see Passion, but, not the raw honesty of love you have in other poems.

    I love the ending and how it ties together the Poem.

    What does the title mean?

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]
      this is amazingly good i enjoyed reading it alot and hope u keep finding inspiration.

    u have a typo here [I] travels from your lips to my soul.
    Like a curved dagger of serenity
    Aimed at a violent heart attack.
    Passion so hot that it stings with pleasure,
    Like a tidal wave raised high to break the shoreline.
    i believe that should be It.
    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by essence of life | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is sensual. I can appreciate these words even now, and my happiness level is not to high, haha. This is beautiful, though, and so honest in it's symbolism that there's nothing left to question in how you feel. Really, this passion takes you everywhere from the sweet country side to the raging waters. Well there's really no words left, except that this honesty isn't really seen here that much anymore, except by the selected few, so it's a really refreshing thing to see this. It's like a breath of fresh air, or a drink of really good water. So I'm going to shut up, now, and read it again.
    Be well,
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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