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    dots Submission Name: Sanddots

    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 139/254/170
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I couldn’t stop for a moment to
    appreciate the white simplicity of marble -
    What beautiful hands, so inhuman,
    So painful to sculpt -
    A hammer into your eyelids:
    From unseeing -
    To black clean holes for mirrors.

    And then the statues carved in bronze -
    Such huge feet and faces, intrepidly distorted
    Perversion, attractive, committing suicide
    On a bridge to the receptive river.

    When two black plaits of Styx
    And claustrophobic Nile
    Find their way into sand,

    No precise place for grave -

    Either to be discovered by two sticks
    Or lash out against the houses
    Tornado-like in hum-drum pity.

    Sand is the greatest peace treaty -
    Better that the Code of Hammurabi:
    A bloody blister on my foot
    Into the gentle substance

    - I walk away -

    And leave a vine already growing.

    Submitted on 2008-07-26 11:17:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      reminds me of this time i ended up at this artist girl's house after a party.

    she had a lot of bronze statues. mostly phallic stuff.
    | Posted on 2008-08-08 00:00:00 | by Boosky | [ Reply to This ]
      your poem is so emotional driven. i feel alot in this poem. it's so natural. you say things from the heart. great piece. Bravo!!!!
    | Posted on 2008-07-31 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      Sand appears very much to be the barrier between a variety of opposing forces (life and death/community and individuality/activity and inertia), but it especially addresses the mysteries of the former pair. The passage of death over the river Styx, the essence of life in the ancient Nile, the Biblical command that the shoreline should mark the furthest boundary of the sea. Things that both marble and bronze cannot experience, but humans know every time they have an injury; the barrier is thin and life is fragile.

    That's my babble for this morning. Take care.

    | Posted on 2008-07-26 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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