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    dots Submission Name: No Longer My Problemdots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       It's a shame when you loose something worthy for foolishness. Then you try your best to make things work but it's just not working because that person realized how much bullsh*t they've put up with you.


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    dotsNo Longer My Problemdots
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    Don’t pull my hand
    To show me where’s darkness
    I’ve seen enough of it
    I walk away from this nonsense.
    The tears floated away
    The rivers and seas were countless,
    I had my share of grief
    There are no more portraits of us.

    You’re no longer my problem.

    Tearing apart what was attached
    I needed scissors,
    Dealing with the downhill’s of luck
    I believed to be cursed.
    But it didn’t matter the role I played
    Nothing is ever rehearsed
    And so I leave my thoughts with you
    Our love has turned to dust.

    You’re no longer my problem.

    Don’t pull me closer
    I’ve already pulled myself away
    It’s the decision I chose
    My warmth is no more on display.
    You wanted it, you got it;
    This is the price you need to pay
    I have a life to live
    And you’re not welcome to stay.





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      Hey, this is the third of your pieces I've read today. This one has eight different poems wrapped into it. Take each line of each stanza separately then including the single line with each I find I can enjoy eight different poems. This shows your masterful delineation of thought. I"ll have to come back to your page again and read some more.
    | Posted on 2008-08-13 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      Tearing apart what was attached
    I needed scissors,
    Dealing with the downhill’s of luck
    I believed to be cursed.
    But it didn’t matter the role I played
    Nothing is ever rehearsed
    And so I leave my thoughts with you
    Our love has turned to dust.

    I have a life to live
    And you’re not welcome to stay.

    I pasted my favorite parts from your poem. Its funny I just finished reading the poem previous to this one where you asked questions and now it seems that you answered them. I love the "youre not welcome to stay" part....its so strong, so determined....stating that youre so sure of your decision that there is no turning back....i like the poem its basically a goodbye poem...stating that youre tired of trying and that its finally time to live your life and not try to fix someone else when there are things in your life that need fixing....this poem made me feel strong....like a woman who has been through many tempests but finally sees the clear sky but the tempest changed her from the woman she was before and now shes a lot stronger waiting to face many battles but determined to never see the tempest again....
    | Posted on 2008-07-28 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]


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