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    dots Submission Name: Everytime the Same. dots
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    Author: Herrick
    ASL Info:    20/M/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.5 - 20/29/11
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 723
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       Gonna add more to this eventually. Only the part after the line is what I intend to be read... the rest just has to go with it.


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    dotsEverytime the Same. dots
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    We always recover
    And it's always the same
    Always a lie, you cry
    appologies
    Everything is good again
    We say it will change
    Never fall in the same hole
    We're back here again
    AGAIN!
    What the hell you do expect?
    I wouldn't notice the lie in your voice?
    That I wouldn't care this time
    after "I'm so sorry"
    Well you're wrong.
    I do care.
    _________________________________

    I'm not doing this anymore
    Where do we go from here?
    Fix it till it happens again
    Just sit down and drink a beer
    Move on and forget about it
    Thats how it works, right?
    So thats what you expect
    When I call back tonight

    No
    Not this time

    I dont know where to go
    Or what its going to take
    There will be no "I'm sorry"
    Already sounds so fake
    Yet, one way or another
    It's going to change tonight
    This can't happen anymore
    And I really don't want to fight
    I guess all I have left is hope
    That when its done, we'll be alright.




    Submitted on 2008-07-27 05:34:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't mean to put in a lot of personal advice, But, trying to make things work is the best way to keep a relationship going, and trust her if she says shes sorry.

    On the poem...You're satisfied up to the line, but past the line your ify?

    I like the gradual conclusion of the poem. But, I think that maybe a little tweaking NOT heavy changes will bring the poem to where you want it, Maybe run through it again, editing very little.

    ~Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-07-27 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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